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Draw a circle,
Fill it with Dreams, hopes,
Fears and that lingering feeling
Something bumping under
Inside, dark places
And hidden corners
Paint little cobwebs of
Imaginary monsters
With their outstretched hands,
Teeth, baited breath

Draw another circle,
Overlapping the first
Set this one a blaze with
Dishes and curios
Dusting, laundry
A career, a forest
The mountains
Your first kiss
Your last breath

In the space between these circles;
This space, the sacred space between the seen and unseen
The imaginary and the real

This is a mundane life.
I'd originally been thinking this was a visual project until I realized I could use the imperative mood and allow the instruction to slowly unveil the final image.

This was for Glory-Be so I made it today's poem, but I think it may be worth coming back to and polishing.

Which raises an interesting question... Is poetry sculpture or dance? I see poetry as sculpture; to be honed and polished and perfected until it's correct but there are many poets I hold in deep respect who seem to feel that poetry is dance; once you've done your piece the words left behind are evidence, not to be tampered with; criticism only useful in getting closer to your goals next time.
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geek96boolean10 Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
...I wanna draw this.
exquisiteoath Apr 30, 2013  Student General Artist
I'd love to see what you come up with.
0hgravity Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful in concept and in execution.

sculpture and dance. I watch the words stream out of me in a dance of sorts and then I go back to capture one moment in the dance to sculpt. If sculpted right with a proper breath of life, the reader should be able to see the dance witnessed - circular in a way. make sense?
good question.
exquisiteoath Jan 19, 2013  Student General Artist
Yes, that makes perfect sense.

I do a lot of reading/thinking etc. in the field of design as well as in art and I find they often overlap. I think what we're talking about here is an approach to creation that is generative and iterative. In that sense I think it's exactly right.
0hgravity Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
good, good.

I would agree.
exquisiteoath Jan 20, 2013  Student General Artist
travelgirlxx Jan 19, 2013
Lovely piece!!
exquisiteoath Jan 19, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you!
vespera Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D I really like your enjambment!
exquisiteoath Jan 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you!
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